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My friends have been murdered
    by porn and computer
    games; they won't play
    catch outside anymore,
But they'll juggle their balls
    while grinding their orcs
    or elves or whatever the hell
    these kids RP as these days.
They're being raped as we speak,
    willfully, smudging an ass
    on the screen like it's a photo-
    copier, looking for that perfect
    MySpace shot, pleading us
    to rim them with comments.
My friends: they're out smoking pot,
    which is fine, but when the pans
    start sizzlin', you should turn
    down the heat just a notch.
They're frying bigger fish, they say,
    while I'm out casting my net,
    solo, whistling a tune only
    the birds understand. The bees
Are calling them: my friends—the girls
    and their pregnancy scares; the guys,
    still unaware of the use of a condom
Or abstinence: my friends—they're drinking
    every night just to sleep
    and think it's the only true
    way to party! 1999 called me
Yesterday; I wanted nostalgia and memories,
    but my friends—my Goddamn friends—
    drive drunk down the lane; now
    I only see them in the obituaries.
The cheese stands alone.
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Given 2008-01-26
Only Acquaintances by *fllnthblnk is an honest piece that doesn't mince words but says it plainly in the language of our generation. ( Featured by StJoan )

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:iconelisabethdarling:
ElisabethDarling Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2010   General Artist
D: The first two stanzas are what happened to my friends.

Awesome poem.
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Ha! I know!
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:icondorylee:
DoryLee Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010
I feel like this, often. The honesty is resonating, and sad. Thanks for your thoughts, though I relate to them all too well.
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:iconsenryu11:
Senryu11 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2010
This poem makes me cry. All of my friends are like this. They are amazing, incredible people without the drugs or the hot boyfriends but they don't see what I see. I always thought I was the odd one out, but guess not.
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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:iconskyeglinton:
SkyEglinton Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2010
whoa. I can relate to this. I love how you formatted your poem.
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:iconmydearcatastrophe:
MyDearCatastrophe Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2010
That is both the truest and most disturbing thing I have ever heard.
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:iconmindclover:
mindclover Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My goodness... I'd say you need some new friends.
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:iconilyilaice:
ilyilaice Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010
This is so ouch! but I guess we all needed that. I think you're very brave for choosing the unfashionable (read: BETTER) choice. (:
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:iconozone-777:
ozone-777 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
Very Nice
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconozone-777:
ozone-777 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010
NP =)
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:iconmaddiegeorgia:
maddiegeorgia Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
wow. this has so much power! and it's so true!
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:icondamagedhomewrecker:
DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
wow, i just got chills. this is raw and true and powerful and emotive and sad. this is amazing.
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Wee!!! Thank you.
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:icondemisepm:
demisePM Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009
this is fuckin' deep, good one.
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:iconotaku-storm:
otaku-storm Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009   Writer
I can really relate to this poem, and I'll admit it- I'm still one of those computer-leechers described in here...but I'm on the "road to recovery" you could say - working on keeping up with extracurriculars and all that.
My friends, on the other hand, don't see all the opportunities the "outside world" holds for them - more than the internet, I tell them but...heh, maybe, in time, they'll see. I just hope my encouragement and suggestions get through.
D: thank you for writing this. It's...it's just amazing...very emotional - I love it.
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:iconsooky-baby:
sooky-baby Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009
This is excellent. I have some idiotic friends that do those stuff. Try to help them but end up hurting yourself
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:iconcarnival-wolf:
carnival-wolf Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009   Photographer
its very true. and i think it really applies to what is going on now, in this time. I agree that the old times are to be missed.
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:icondrop-asd:
drop-asd Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2009
This is a poem so many can relate to. It has this pull in it, this breathtaking emotion of both disappointment, alienation and fury.
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:iconloondas:
loondas Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009
The world may be turing in that direction, but only because we all to often don't have the courage to stand up to it, and our friends. if the world is going to change, we have to push it to where WE want it to go. however, just knowing that is not always enough.

now, enough rambling, great work, and i hope for you to find happiness and true friends.
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:iconthecherryking:
TheCherryKing Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
:iconclapplz:
well said.
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:iconbloodspatteredsnow:
bloodspatteredsnow Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009
It's like my friends, sadly.
I'm the only one that isn't like that.
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:iconunyieldinghierophant:
UnyieldingHierophant Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2009  Student Writer
Accurate description of the world as it is today.
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:iconsoutheastofthemoon:
SOUTHEASToftheMOON Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2009
well presented points. interesting use of imagery. and overall wonderful piece. :jarklarge:
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:iconaliaara:
Aliaara Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009
Yesterday; I wanted nostalgia and memories,
but my friends—my Goddamn friends—
drive drunk down the lane; now
I only see them in the obituaries.

The emotion in this segment right here I could connect to and really feel, unlike most of what I read. Great poem.
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I'm glad you liked the ending.
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:iconsaceronsage:
Saceronsage Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
The damned truth of our generation
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:iconkill343guiltyspark:
kill343guiltyspark Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2009
I just want you to know that to this day this is still my favorite poem... So true.
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
this is pretty damn awesome;
I really dig this,

thr
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thr
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gh.
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner May 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
No worries.
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:iconpostaurora:
PostAurora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2009
This is not just my friends, this is my boyfriend, my brother, the two men I love most in this world. I unexpectedly found your words and they cut--they're that good.
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:iconsakura-tennyo:
sakura-tennyo Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
it says only truth about a generation. well done.
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:iconkneelingglory:
KneelingGlory Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2009
I like the procession of age-related activities. Its subtle, and thus well done :)
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:iconposhlost:
poshlost Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
"Goddamn[ed] friends"?

I think it's good at being frank without being cliche as so much is these days. Also reminds me of some Dashboard songs.

Thanks for writing
J
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:iconlasagnabomb:
lasagnabomb Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2009
high ho!
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:iconrenrenisthename:
renrenisthename Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2009
That is really deep...
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:icontheodamus:
theodamus Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009
I favourited this poem long ago, and still I come back and read it again and again. It's written simply but you've managed to capture this feeling of frustration and not quite understanding what went wrong while at the same time seeing all too clearly that it has and how hopeless that can feel.
I just got a phone call from an old friend in the middle of the night and it made me think of the last stanza, so here I am to read again.
Thanks for one of my favourite poems.
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:iconmoondrunk:
moondrunk Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009   Writer
damn if i don't keep coming back to this one!
i will not say anything that has already been said
but I will say this much
Never add
or take away anything from this piece
EVER.
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:iconburiixd:
buriiXD Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2009
Wow... this poem is amazing and the disturbing thing is that it's true.. Most of my mates have been consumed by that fucken Wow game and they don't even wanna hang out with mates anymore....
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I know what you mean! I remember going to my friends' house (there was about 6 of 'em all rooming together) and when I walked in to where they all had their computers set up, not one of them even looked up from their screen or said "hi" to me. And I haven't seen any of them for a year! For some, computer games are just too addicting...
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:iconendless-rainbow:
Endless-RainBow Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
GOD.... It is really wonderful. *
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:iconheavenly-succbus:
Heavenly-Succbus Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
never forget your friends.
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:iconnedolya:
Nedolya Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2009   Photographer
Not sure if this is the right expression in English, but great structure,the words are perfectly following each other...and such an everyday subject gets a poetic taste.Lovely,just lovely.
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconchrysanthe-al:
chrysanthe-aL Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2009
bloody honest.
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:icondonateu:
Donateu Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
unfortuantly, it's true...
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:iconidiotxxsavante:
IdiotxxSavante Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
This is really sad and makes me wish for the good ol' days.
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