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Each day is its own microstep--
since I woke from my mother's womb,
I longed to mimic new words, trammel
the sound until it blossomed

like a newborn, and oh how I birthed
stories--told them how I wanted
the author's sacrosanct title
once I've grown. But growing meant

learning the practice of citizens
and their due contribution: beast-slaying
nature of please, thank you,
an apology: sincere

or not. Then there is time--the first
breath of nine, exhalation
of five, the suffocating mandate
of overtime. You grow used to it:

the cyclical disappearance of parents,
pervasive need of sleep, a home-
cooked meal's gradual transmogrification
to a microwave's impatient beeps,

the drive-thru's static, monotoned voice
by a man who has already learned
what I am learning: to cherish
the alarm's morning hymn over my mother's--

now I'm rarely late for work--can navigate
those can-lined aisles, the cold-grey
of the warehouse with deep strides
until I lose track of every step within

my eight hours--my mind always bursting
with plotlines and character arcs, ideas
too many: a spider caught in its own
gossamer web--at home, a stack of notebooks

and their yearning quietude, untouched
by a pencil's smearing prod; a desktop
littered with titled text files, but
a near empty white once double-clicked.

This must be my journey, I tell myself,
the giant stone that is my thousand miles
--after ten long years of work complete,
and only have I weathered off a chip,

have barely taken a single step.
Previous NaPoWriMo 2012: Day 2

“The journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step.”
--Lao Tzu

Saw this quote on a calender at work. SEE THE REFERENCE. So I took a half-hour break or so and wrote a basic draft of this. Posted here is a quickly (very, very quickly) edited version. I MUST SLEEP NOW.

Oh, yeah... and I totally wanted to write novels when I was younger, but ended up writing poetry when I got older.

WTF, mate?!
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Apologies to Lao by `fllnthblnk Suggester Writes: A feeling every type of artist likely encounters from time to time. ( Suggested by LiliWrites and Featured by BeccaJS )

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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
This is really lovely. Congrats on the DD! (:
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :cookie:
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Abraxas-within Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, you've just bottled up the lives of millions with this poem, including mine. That's pretty much what life is for most people; a journey from childhood innocence and curiosity to the static, soulless adult world. Once we get in a rut, it's hard for us to step out and start our true journey. You're an awesome writer, time to go stalk your gallery. :)
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ugh... I hate this static, soulless adult world. WHERE ARE MY VIDEO GAMES AND COOKIES EVERYDAY, DAMMIT.

Anywoo, thanks for reading! :cookie::cookie::cookie:
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SketchedExistence Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Nicely done! You've definitely captured slices of a lot of artists/writers lives in this one. A joy to read. Congrats on the DD!
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks a bunch!
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SketchedExistence Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome! ^^
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
This is a wonderful my friend, the kind where many lines vie to be your favorite and once you've finished reading you immediately scroll to the top to read again. :heart:

Congratulations on a well-deserved DD William!
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, man! :cookie:
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swizzleSTIX41 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Oh to "trammel
the sound until it blossomed"
,
delicious words for a delicious idea!
A wonderful choice for today's DD for sure.
Congratulations :highfive:
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :cookie:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations! :heart:
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the suggestion! :hug::cookie::heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:!
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :dead:
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD! :heart:
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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catluvr2 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :+favlove:
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :cookie:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. May cookies please your every waking moment. :cookie:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
Thank you, i hope that too!
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012   Writer
Beast slaying nature of please, thank you... - sensational read!
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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denlm Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Oh how I could relate to this one! Also loved the line break here:
an apology: sincere

or not.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You just figured out how to tell a story in fewer words is all. ;)
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angelStained Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012   Writer
I think they the thought you've channelled into it shows. It's an interesting read indeed at a nice pace.

As for your comments, I think as kids novelists always came across as more 'fun' (people listen to wow, your stories!) and perhaps even glamorous than 'stuffy' poets, but it changed as we grew up. Or something.
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, yes... or something...
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FusingMatt Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really quite interesting. Good work :) The fifth segment is probably my favourite.
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